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[sentientsystem]

hey guys, i've created a few "gag-sites", to redirect people to, for various reasons, such as http://whiny.me/

what i'm NOT happy with, is the wording of the "self-help plan". i feel it's a little on the "dark" or "violent" side, but i still want it to be whitty and sarcastic and clever. does any one have any ideas as to how to pull it off? thanks.

 

[Phreaddee]

I don't see it as witty or clever really.
Saying "your whiny now kill yourself" (to paraphrase) I just don't see the point myself. Maybe I'm just getting old and not "cool" enough.

 

[sentientsystem]

no, no, that's my whole point. i was trying for clever, and got violent instead (oops, lol).

 

[Phreaddee]

http://www.cracked.com/blog/6-harsh-truths-that-will-make-you-better-person/

 

[sentientsystem]

you, sir, are a gentleman and a scholar! thanks for the great resource - with inspirational material like that, i'm BOUND to come up with something better .


=== edit ===
you know, after reading that, it sounds like the speech i give to my younger cousins, but, much more robust, whitty, sarcastic, and well-rounded. i'm gonna read around on their site for more ideas on "whitt" and "sarcasm". thanks again for the tip - i wish there was a "thanks" button on here ()!

 

[chrishirst]

i wish there was a "thanks" button on here ()!

There is ... it's the 'Like' link.

 

[sentientsystem]

never would have seen that if you didn't point it out